Thank you for your interest in our game! Before we can accept you into Snowblind, we would like to see the following revisions:

Overall, your application looks good. However, the personality section reads quite a bit like a background section. We see a lot of the reasons behind her personality and a description of certain game mechanics, but the personality section doesn't describe her actual traits as well. We have the "why" behind her personality without as much of the "what" of her personality, and we would like to see that included more directly.

Please reply to this comment with your revisions within three days or your slot will be forfeit.